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And they trotted away into the sunset…..

…..They came trotting by, man and stallion, in style and stood captured in time. Before them stood a woman from another generation, from another world and oh! were they intrigued.

“Who are you, woman?” the ravishing man with the stubble beard asked.

“You look parched. This ain’t your kinda place, is it?”

The beautiful brown glowing horse neighed in unison as if agreeing with his master and companion of years.

The woman looked bewildered. Here she was, away timeless in the desert sand, thirsty for not just water but for the love she had always wanted but somehow never got. All that was left inside of her was a heart cracked and hurt by lovers who betrayed her when she had asked for more than mere lust. And here stood a man, tall and handsome wanting to know whether she wanted something? No one had ever asked her ever. It was she who had been trailing love  and had eventually been lost in the ravages of cruel time.

The cowboy gave his rough hand, put it around her slender waist oh! so gently and she landed right before him on the stallion, too scared that this beautiful moment would vanish even before she could marinate in its cozy warmth…..

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42 thoughts on “And they trotted away into the sunset…..

  1. The cowboy gave his rough hand, put it around her slender waist oh! so gently and she landed right before him on the stallion, too scared that this beautiful moment would vanish even before she could marinate in its cozy warmth…..

    love your descriptive words, a beautifully crafted tale.
    well done.
    🙂

  2. Wow! Heavenly. 🙂 Didn’t know you were so good with romance. I often find it the most difficult genre. Loved reading it.

  3. Jingle :
    The cowboy gave his rough hand, put it around her slender waist oh! so gently and she landed right before him on the stallion, too scared that this beautiful moment would vanish even before she could marinate in its cozy warmth…..
    love your descriptive words, a beautifully crafted tale.
    well done.

    Dear Jingle,

    I love this whole concept of creating a very very short story with a picture as a prompt. It is much more challenging than poetry with a picture prompt. Glad you liked it…

  4. Smita Luthra :
    Wow! Heavenly. Didn’t know you were so good with romance. I often find it the most difficult genre. Loved reading it.

    Dear Smita,

    Oh! So very sweet of you to say so. Didn’t know myself…. about writing romance short and sweet although I have written longer stories on it..

  5. BUTTERFLIES OF TIME :
    Aah! the begining of a romance and it ended too soon. I appreciate your ability to write so descriptively of a scene that it keeps the reader wanting more.Good job.

    Hi Butterflies,

    Thanks so much. Thought I’d try something new. Have been writing short stories but not sooooooo short. Glad you liked it.

  6. Ashwathy :
    That’s a lot of imagination to write from that one single pic!!

    Hi Ashwathy,

    You liked it? Good to hear that. Maybe, I can begin writing the novel I had always planned writing but postponed….

  7. Wow…what a vivid description, i could visualize every written word…
    how did u manage this story with just one visual clue…
    it’s beautiful

  8. prerna :
    Wow…what a vivid description, i could visualize every written word…
    how did u manage this story with just one visual clue…
    it’s beautiful

    Dear Prerna,

    Thanks. Nice you liked the tiny story. Just let my imagine soar….

  9. 🙂 – – This is what I have been trying too with some rules on the number of words to be used. I love the fact that I am forced to say something within limits. It is surely fun but I can not do this so easily as you have done Shail! Nice try, if this was your first. I am such a bad story teller :-(.

  10. knot2share :
    – – This is what I have been trying too with some rules on the number of words to be used. I love the fact that I am forced to say something within limits. It is surely fun but I can not do this so easily as you have done Shail! Nice try, if this was your first. I am such a bad story teller .

    Dear Shree,

    Thanks. Nice to see you here. Yes indeed, this is my first attempt at writing a story using a picture as prompt. I have written bigger stories but not such tiny ones and that too being dictated by a picture…

  11. ah…the moment! you captured it beautifully, Shail. Romance is my genre and I loved it. John Wayne is awesome too!

  12. Angela Felsted :
    I like the character development in this. You could turn it into a novel.

    Hi Angela,

    So nice of you. I am glad you liked the story. As far as turning it into a novel is concerned, your comment is encouraging. Maybe, I should start the novel which is pending in the attic of my mind….

  13. Hope :
    ah…the moment! you captured it beautifully, Shail. Romance is my genre and I loved it. John Wayne is awesome too!

    Dear Hope,

    You liked it? So nice. Since romance is your genre as you mention, that you find the short story interesting is a good pat on the back for me.

  14. Many a woman has looked at a picture of John Wayne, and dreamed of being carried off into the sunset with him, but few have been able to put it into words as you have!
    — K

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

  15. Kay Davies :
    Many a woman has looked at a picture of John Wayne, and dreamed of being carried off into the sunset with him, but few have been able to put it into words as you have!
    — K
    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

    Dear Kay,

    Thanks. That is a lovely appreciation of a small attempt. Very encouraging….

  16. Short Story Slam Week 4 is still open for submission,
    Come on in,
    We love your creativity/talent…
    Happy Thursday!
    Love & hugs.
    xoxox
    bless you.

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